Commentary on Ondine Page 8:
Part of the idea behind this page and the next was to further develop the idea that we are now in a dream-like world, where the senses are more important than the overall structure and cohesion. We see shapes, we hear noises, we feel textures, but little is presented to connect them all together. As in most dreams, adherence to real world rules is not required, nor encouraged, even though this particular dream world draws from real memories and has a semblance of realism to it.
And of course, this is the first time we outright see another character, or rather a character’s eye. Even though it’s not explicitly shown, it should be obvious that the eye is looking at the protagonist, and that it is not his eye. The fact that the iris is the same color as the water serves to hint at the nature of the character, and the pronounced eyelashes indicate a female. If I were to redo this page, I would make the eye wide open as opposed to half-closed. As it stands, I think there is too much of a “bedroom eyes” look to it. I think it would work better, and feel somewhat more voyeuristic and strange, if the eye was wide open and looked more focused. It still works, but it could work better.
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